I've written and/or co-written seven stories thus far this year, and I think this is the best one. A half dozen other people have told me the same thing.
Anything more I say about it would spoil it, so please do check it out here. That's me doing a rather faltering dramatic reading. (Mental note: don't attempt such things when you're gassy. You have to keep stopping the camera, and even when you're not belching you tend to randomly break words in half or use odd diction)